ESSAY WORKSHOP

Welcome to the English 3 and 4 essay workshop page! Everything you need to know about the workshop is located on this page. However, if you have any questions, please feel free to email me at mcquillana@parklandsd.org. Seniors, thank you very much helping my juniors in the writing process. We all really appreciate it. Have fun and happy writing!
Ms. McQuillan

The Assignment

Many believe that it is our "civic duty," or responsibility as citizens, to give back to our community/country whenever we can. Unfortunately, far too many people do not live up to those expectations. So, you will write a five-paragraph persuasive essay convincing people to take an interest in a charity/cause of your choice. You may choose any charity/organization, from a local Parkland-run group to an international cause. The choice is yours!
*Downloadable Handout: [[file:Charity Essay 11th.doc] Websites for Research:Here are general two websites that have a great general listing of charities and organizations out there to get involved in. Once you’ve selected a charity/organization, I would suggest looking up its main page.1) Charity Watch A-Z (*Click on the “Top-Rated” link to see charities organized by category.)
2) Charity Navigator


Grading & Editing Criteria
The juniors will be assessed on the major writing traits - Focus, Organization, Content, Style, and Conventions. Here is a general explanation of what each senior editor should look for when they are editing the essays.

FOCUS - Did the writer stay on task and persuade you to get involved or did he/she ramble? Did the writer stick to the given thesis statement?
ORGANIZATION - Was the essay well organized and easy to follow? Did the essay follow the 5-paragraph essay format (attention grabber, 3-pt thesis, etc.)? Were transition words/phrases used to help direct the audience?
CONTENT - Did the writer incorporate a number of examples/reasons to support his/her claim? Were the examples well-explained or were they simply listed?
STYLE - Did the writer paint a picture for you, carefully choosing descriptive details? Did he/she write with confidence and put his/her own personal "stamp" on the essay? Did the essay appeal to your emotions? Did the writer avoid 1st person language unless they were explaining a personal experience with the organization?
CONVENTIONS - Did the writer use appropriate/correct grammar, punctuation, spelling, and format?

*Downloadable Grading Rubric:


Senior Editors: When you are editing, any comments (positive or suggestions for improvement) on the above mentioned writing traits would be greatly appreciated. The questions listed next to each trait can help direct you on what to look for when you are reading. We all agreed that it would most helpful if you typed directly "in" the essay in a different color or using the "tracking" options. That way, you can type comments, questions, suggestions, etc. right where the problem area is located. You may also want to underline specific words or sentences to show which specific area you are referring to in the essay as well. Even if you feel something is not quite right, but can't put your finger on what, feel free to simply type that or type "awkward" in the essay. We can work on how to fix those areas in class later. At the end of the essay, it would be also be great if you could type a brief paragraph summarizing your thoughts. All of your comments and thoughts are greatly appreciated. It is a HUGE help to all of us, so thanks again for all of your help and hard work!


SUBMISSION AREA

Saving word documents:
Once you've finished typing or editing, save your file as a word document. Use the following format to name/save each draft.
(1) Juniors' Rough Draft - "First Name Last Name RD1"
(2) Senior Editors - "Junior Student's First and Las Name EDITED"
(3) Juniors' Revised Draft - "First Name Last Name FINAL"

*For example, if Mrs. Brobst was a senior student editing Ms. McQuillan's Paper, here is what each draft should be saved as:
JUNIOR STUDENT Ms. McQuillan
SENIOR STUDENT
Mrs. Brobst
ROUGH DRAFT
Amber McQuillan RD1

EDITED PAPER
Amber McQuillan EDITED
FINAL REVISION Amber McQuillan FINAL

How to submit/upload a file:
Now that you're finished with your file, you can submit it here.
1) Click the "Edit This Page" icon at the top of the page.
2) Scroll down the page. Find your name and click so the cursor is in the appropriate submission box.
3) Click on the "Palm Tree" icon in the center of the Editor Toolbar.
4) Click on the "Browse" button underneath the heading Upload New Files.
5) Find and "open" your file.
6) Click "Upload."
7) Now, click on the picture icon of your file located directly above.
8) Close that box and click "SAVE" in the Editor Toolbar.


*Wiki Submission Powerpoint:

JUNIORS: If you have not submitted the rough draft as of 3rd period on Monday, February 1st, you will see a statement that says "Not finished as of 2/1" next to your name. When you are finished, delete that statement and attach your file!!!


AFTER THE FINAL DRAFT IS COMPLETE, GO HERE TO COMPLETE A SURVEY:
http://mcquillan.wikispaces.com/SURVEY+OF+EDITORS



Writers: Ms. McQuillan's Pd 1 Students
Editors: Mrs. Brobst's Students / Ms. Tessitore's Students
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Writers: Ms. McQuillan's Pd 2 Students
Editors: Mrs. Brobst's Students / Ms. Tessitore's Students
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Writers: Ms. McQuillan's Pd 3 Students
Editors: Mrs. Brobst's Students / Ms. Tessitore's Students
JUNIOR STUDENT

SENIOR STUDENT

ROUGH DRAFT

EDITED PAPER

FINAL REVISION